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Writing Samples
Band 4

Situation: Your class picnic has been postponed because of heavy rain. Task: Write a letter to your friend about your feelings and suggest other fun indoor activities. Length: ~50 words

Dear friend. Our class picnic has been postponed because of
heavy
Correct article usage
the heavy
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 rain. I feel sad when I listen to
this
Linking Words
 message.
As a
Linking Words
result
Add a comma
result,
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 we cannot
outdoor
Verb problem
do outdoor
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activities
Use synonyms
but
Punctuation problem
, but
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 we can
indoor
Verb problem
do indoor
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activities
Use synonyms
.
For example
Linking Words
, we can communicate, read books and
other
Verb problem
do other
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activities
Use synonyms
. I think it is very enjoyable because we can
Use synonyms
activities
Verb problem
do activities
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 together. Your sincerely. Aziza.

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content
Task response: say how you feel and add more ideas for indoors. end with a clear closing.
organization
Coherence and cohesion: use simple link words like and, but, so. put new ideas in new sentences.
tone
You show a kind tone.
content
You list indoor ideas.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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