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Band 2

The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today.

The maps illustrate the changes to the layout of Beechwood
Farm
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 from 1950 and at
present
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the present
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 after redevelopment.
Overall
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, the
farm
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 was a totally agricultural
area
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 and
livestock
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a livestock
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 farming field in 1950.
Although
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 some areas remained unchanged, it has been added numerous new facilities
for
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have been added for
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tourism
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the tourism
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 industry and energy production. In 1950, there was a large
area
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 for raising
sheeps
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sheep
 in the northeast of the
farm
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, which has been divided into two parts for solar panels on the right side and
camping
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a camping
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 field on the left side. These two parts
each have
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have each
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 constructed a parking
area
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 for visitors to park their
car
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cars
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. The barn
which
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, which
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 was located near the
farmhouse
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farmhouse,
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 has been relocated under
triangle road
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Triangle Road
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. Meanwhile, the old barn site has been substituted for holiday cottages. As for other details, the track has been
transffered
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transferred
 into a new road, allowing tourists to drive into the
farm
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. The farmhouse, chicken
area
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, fruit trees, soft fruits,
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and vegetables
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vegetables
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vegetable
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 areas mostly stayed
untoched
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untouched
, except for
an
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the
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 addition of a
farm
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 shop along the new road in the fruit tree site.

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grammar
Fix small grammar and spelling errors so the meaning is clear.
coherence
task
Give clear, exact details about each change and keep to simple facts.
content
There is a clear idea of what the map shows and a basic plan.
content
The essay has the main changes in time (past and now).
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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