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Writing Samples
Band 4

Some people think that homework is not necessary for students' development. Do you agree or disagree?

Many individuals claim that 'additional duty',
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development
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. I strongly disagree,
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 reinforcement of learning and
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 management are two abilities that homework improves, which
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 are necessary during young
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 maturing. First of all, the
students
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 the fact that in many educational facilities,
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, assignment in writing an essay
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positively
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 from their very young age learn how to manage their schedules adequately, in spite of take-home tasks.
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 its own objectives related
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development
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, to include our leisure
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, people's
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, in my
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 homework is crucial for
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, because of its advantages,
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 as reinforcement of their learning and necessary
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 management.
This
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 is because of educational facilities professors setting take-home tasks for
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. Ultimately, in order to enhance
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, it is required to follow the advantages mentioned above.

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structure
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coherence
Use words to link ideas, like 'also', 'but', 'for example', 'so', to show how your ideas go.
examples
Give one or two full and clear examples that fit the idea.
grammar
Check small errors in grammar and word form so the text is easy to read.
strength
You show a clear view that homework is needed.
strength
Two main ideas are given to back the view.
strength
There is an intro and a close part.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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