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It is widely acknowledged that there are significant learning differences between boys and girls. Therefore many people believe that single-sex education in the best method to help students succeed. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a system? Give reasons for your answer and your opinions.

Single-sex education is the best bet on success, as it is largely accepted
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 that the difference in learning between
boys
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 and
girls
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 is huge. Individual progress could be attained by being
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 focused and private, but it could
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 lead to
adverseries
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adversities
 like
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 inequality and social discomfort. Focusing on the learning ability of
one
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gender
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 can increase knowledge by making it more
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 related.
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, if a school is dedicated to
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 only, it would be easier to learn about female genitelia and physiology in detail.
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 would give access to more learning without evident discomfort from the opposite sex.
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,
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 would be done in a private setting and will respect the boundaries of the
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.
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, teenage
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 would have the chance to focus on studies without having the pressure of
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 competition. It is documented
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 that
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 are better at studies
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boys
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 excel in physical activities.
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approch
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approach
 will give space to explore the form of education suitable for a particular sex type.
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, there could be some downsides to
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 system. Having different
environment
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environments
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 for various genders can lead to
supremacy
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 of
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. Take
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 example,
boys
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 would consider themselves superior to
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 in sports,
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 discouraging ladies
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 their interests in physical activities.
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 could ultimately result in
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 inequality in the long run. With supreme
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hierarchy
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 comes social class.
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,
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gender
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 would claim superiority over the other and predispose the inferior
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 to social discomfort and distorted moral obligations. In conclusion, creating a form of learning for
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 specific
gender
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 could create a safe environment for deeper learning in schools, but ultimately establish a social class system that would prove counter-productive.

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task response
Give the view clearly in the first paragraph and stick to this idea in the rest of the essay. In body paragraphs, show 2-3 main ideas and explain them with clear, simple examples that fit the question.
coherence and cohesion
Make a simple plan: one paragraph for intro, two for pros and cons, one for conclusion. Use easy links like first, also, but, however, and finally to connect ideas. Keep ideas easy and in a straight line.
content
The writer tries to show both sides of the topic.
structure
There is an ending that sums up the view.
examples
Some examples are used to show points.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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