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Band 2.5

Some people believe that government spends too much money on space research while there are still a lot of problems on the earth. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In the modern world,
governments
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priortise
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prioritise
 space
researches
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research
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 and
the
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apply
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argue that some
people
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 believe that there are other
differents
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different
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challanges
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challenges
 on the earth that may require more attention
, personally
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. Personally
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,
i'm
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I
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 totally disagree with that
and
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, and
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 I think a balanced focus for both sides is needed.
Since
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couple
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a couple
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 of decades,
the
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apply
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space and
researches
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research
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became
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have become
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optimum
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an optimum
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 goal for
the
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apply
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governments
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, as
governments
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really
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have really
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realize
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realised
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 that
better
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a better
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 future
is
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can
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 only come from
hardworking
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hard work
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 in
present
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the present
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,
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.
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A alot
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alot
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lot
 of discoveries we enjoy today and
very
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are very
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 obsessed
about
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with
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 they
became
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become
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real
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a reality
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 as
result
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a result
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 of our
predecessors
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predecessors'
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 continuous
working
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work
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, adopting
different
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a different
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 mindset .
space
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Space
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researches
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research
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 will lead to
variety
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a variety
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 of discoveries that we can't imagine today
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, and
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this
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undeniable
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is undeniable
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.
on
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another
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the
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hand
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other hand
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, the
argue
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argument
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 of some
people
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 about
the
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investing
on
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in
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 other earth
problem
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problems
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 is more important
,
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;
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 there
a
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are a
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lot of
problem
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problems
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 that require
government's
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the government's
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 attention
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such
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, such
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 as modern learning, public transportation, medical health
instituations
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institutions
...
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,
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etc
this
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 undeniable, these are very essential domains that play
vital
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a vital
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 role in the
life
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apply
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quality of
people
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 today
and
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, and
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 they
can
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cannot
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 be ignored.
in
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In
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 conclusion, a
balance
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balanced
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 focus is required
and
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, and
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 the
governments
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 should spend the money here and there in order
the
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for the
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people
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live
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to live
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in
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at
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high
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a high
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level
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apply
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standard of
live
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living
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while
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 they will feel importance for that
reasearch
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research
 for the new generations.

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planning
Plan a short map before you write. Put one idea per paragraph. Start with a clear view and end with a simple summary.
coherence
Use links to show how ideas connect. Use easy join words and check your grammar so each sentence is easy to read.
examples
Use a real example from life or news to back your ideas.
content
You state your view and you try to give reasons.
structure
You use some long sentences to show your view.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • allocate funds
  • pressing issues
  • technological advancements
  • international collaboration
  • long-term benefits
  • economic impact
  • job creation
  • inspire future generations
  • basic human needs
  • quality of life
  • satellite communications
  • innovation
  • global challenges
  • scientific research
  • universe exploration
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