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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society?

These days, many aspects of life have changed compared to the past, and one of the most influential changes is the poor
of
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in
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 studying
science
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subjects
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 in university.
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 essay will show some reasons for
this
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 problem and
effects
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its effects
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 on
society
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.
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 with,
although
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science
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majors
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 in university play
significant
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 role in advanced
society
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, it has many
students
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 do not choose it.
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, there are some reasons for that.
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,
science
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subjects
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 may be more difficult than others
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such
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, such
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 as mathematics, physics, chemistry, and others. So,
students
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 might choose
easily
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apply
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specialists
such
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 as history, arts, languages, and others
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easily.
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, many
science
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subjects
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 have requirements like lab and experiments,
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 it may lead to
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.
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, many
science
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 courses have two parts: practical and theoretical.
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sciences
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science
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subjects
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 could
need
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incur
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 more
cost
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costs
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from
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students
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such
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 as materials and tools, and some universities do not support them.
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, some
education
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educational
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organizations
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organisations
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 put difficult conditions for these
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, because they seek to choose the best
students
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. In terms of
effects
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the effects
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this
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 issue
on
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has on
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society
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, it may have negative effects
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 number of individuals in these
majors
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 not enough, at result that it could lack
workers
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of workers
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 in some jobs in the future. It is
also
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 possible to say that
society
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 will suffer from employees.
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for
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For
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 instance, recent studies have shown that advanced countries focus on
sciences specialist
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science specialists
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. By way of conclusion, government and education
organizations
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organisations
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 should encourage
students
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 to attend these
majors
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 and support them, and they could
produce
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provide
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 financial support to them
since
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to
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 eliminate
this
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 problem.

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structure
Plan your writing. Start with a short opening that states the problem and your view. Then write 3 clear ideas with one idea per paragraph. End with a short finish that restates your view.
organization
Do each paragraph on one main idea. Use a clear sentence at the start of the paragraph, then add short facts or examples.
grammar
Watch grammar and form. Use simple, short sentences. Check subject with verb and punctuation.
lexical
Use small, easy words. Prefer facts and examples. Use linking words like first, also, but, so, finally to show cause and effect.
content
Add more clear examples to back up each reason and show more thought about the effect on society.
content
The writer tries to cover both reasons and effects.
structure
There is an intro and a closing line.
content
Some ideas are easy to see and are explained simply.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deter
  • promotion
  • opportunities
  • role models
  • lucrative
  • employment
  • gender stereotypes
  • societal norms
  • access to information
  • technological stagnation
  • shortage
  • skilled professionals
  • innovation
  • healthcare sector
  • workforce
  • global competitiveness
  • advancements
  • economic growth
  • public health services
  • environmental sciences
  • combat climate change
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