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Writing Samples
Band 1

Many people sayt that we now live in ,,consumers societiesʼʼ where money and possessions are given to much importance. To what extent do you agree or diagree

In
the
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apply
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recent years,cost
expensis
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expenses
is
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have been
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 rapidly increasing in a lot of countries
over
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around
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world
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the world
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which
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, which
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 is more likely
lead
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to lead
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 to
be
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apply
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consumer
societies
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societies,
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while
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this
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 may seem like a controversial move to some. I
firmaly
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firmly
 believe the world has changed and we have to
accommodite
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accommodate
 the fact that we are living in
consumers
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consumer
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 societies.
to begin
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 with, In the capital cities of the most modern countries today, the number of people who is living has increased, the people come from overseas, either they escape from wars, looking for more better opporunities, there are a variety of reasons the people immigrate from their original countries,
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, the high demand on particular spots of land to live, consequencely causes alot of challanges
such
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 as food, housing, medical health, job opportunities ..etc ,
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, it is the government responsibilites to find soultions the compitation is highly increased,

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content
Plan your answer before you write. State your view clearly in the introduction.
structure
Make 2 main points. Support them with simple examples.
grammar
Use short, clear sentences. Avoid long run-on lines.
coherence
Use linking words to connect ideas (first, next, however, therefore).
lexical
Check spelling and small mistakes (recent years, costs, opportunities).
content
The writer shows a wish to talk about a big topic.
coherence
There is an effort to connect the ideas to the topic.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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