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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in an European country bbetween 1979 and 2004

The line graph illustrates how four types of meat were consumed in a country in Europe from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
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, we can see that the most bought meat was chicken,
while
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 the least was fish.
Also
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,
it is clear that
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 the year 1984 had the highest
number
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 of sales among all
years
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the years
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 given.
According to
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 the data shown, chicken started with a
number
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 near 150, but it rose to 250
at the end
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 of the timeline.
In contrast
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, beef started well with a
number
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 around 230;
however
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, it kept decreasing, reaching a
number
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 that was about 120 in 2004. Lamb and fish both started with 150 and 60, respectively. Lamb fell by almost
30
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30%
 in 1984, but it increased by
30
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30%
 in 1989,
while
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 lamb continued declining. Unfortunately, both of the two meats ended the period with a
number
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 that was under 100, showing that they were not
favored
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favoured
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 by people.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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