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The diagrams below show the changes of a town called Bridgetown 1700 and 2000. Compare and summarize the changes of the Bridgetown.

The given diagram depicts the changes
underwent
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that occurred
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 in Bridgetown between 1700 and 2000.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there is a noticeable development
occured
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occurred
 during the time span. The school was built by removing the castle
while
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 upgrading
of
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apply
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the
bridge
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 to promote efficient
transporation
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transportation
 service. In 1700, the town was more
under-developed
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underdeveloped
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consisting
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, consisting
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a
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of a
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bridge
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, markets and a castle.
River
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The river
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 flows
from
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through
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 the middle of the
town
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town,
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in
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across
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 which
the
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a
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bridge
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 has
built
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been built
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across
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apply
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it
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apply
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. Markets were situated
in
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on
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 the northwestern side of the
city
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. More green
area
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 can be seen in
initial
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the initial
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 year. In 2000, several renovations can be seen to soothe the
transporation
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transportation
 in the
city
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. A railway track was newly built across the river
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, whereas
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whereas
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while
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 upgrading the existing
bridge
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.
Castle
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The castle
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which
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, which
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 was
place
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placed
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 in the northern
area
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 of the
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city
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city,
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were
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was
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 removed and
made
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replaced with
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 a school which would help to enhance the literacy rates of individuals. Green
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area
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areas
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 were changed to a
build-up
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built-up
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area
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which
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, which
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 reveals the development of the
city
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 during the time period.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bridge, city, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • infrastructure
  • residential area
  • commercial district
  • land use
  • expansion
  • transformation
  • modernization
  • industrial
  • recreational facilities
  • housing development
  • transportation networks
  • demolished
  • constructed
  • preserved
  • evolution
  • adaptation
  • architectural styles
  • cityscape
  • historical preservation
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