The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999.

The line graph illustrates the proportion of families in the United States that owned five types of technology between 1995 and 1999.
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ownership
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of all technologies increased over the period, with mobile phones showing the most significant growth. It is
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clear that washing machines were the most commonly owned item throughout the years shown. In 1995, around 60% of households had a washing machine, and
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figure rose steadily to about 80% in 1999, remaining the highest over the five years. Computer
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followed a similar upward trend, climbing from about 40% to roughly 70% over the same period.
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, more rapid growth was seen in the remaining technologies. Mobile phone
ownership
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increased sharply from about 18% in 1995 to around 75% in 1999, surpassing computer
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and becoming the second highest figure.
The internet
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Internet
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ownership
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also
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grew significantly from around 10% to 50%. DVD player
ownership
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was the only category to experience a slight fall, before climbing to match the level of the internet between 1997 and 1998, and ending at approximately 40% in 1999.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words ownership with synonyms.
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