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The graph below shows the changes in production (millions)of three products in a garment factory from 1990 to 2010.

The line graph illustrates the changes in
production
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 of suits, dresses, and coats in one factory between 1990 and 2010, measured in millions of items.
Overall
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, the
production
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 of all three products increased over the period, with coat
production
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 experiencing the most significant growth. It is
also
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 evident that suits were the most manufactured in the early years, but they were overtaken by coats by the end of the period. In 1990, the factory produced 15
million
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 suits.
Although
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this
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 figure peaked at nearly 25
million
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 in 1995, it consistently declined between 1995 and 2005 before recovering to around 19
million
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. Meanwhile, dress
production
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 followed a more moderate upward trend, increasing from 10
million
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 in 1990 to 15
million
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 in 2010, despite a slight fall around 2000.
By contrast
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, coat
production
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 grew rapidly from approximately 7
million
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 to 25
million
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. It surpassed dress
production
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 in 1995 and exceeded suit
production
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 in the early 2000s, becoming the most produced garment by the end of the period.

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