Few countries think that people at the age greater than 30 can do things like vote for country, marriage, getting driving license etc… while most of the country oppose. What do you think?
I think that every
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can vote for
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and get driving
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before 30years old
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now young
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social media than now old
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young
can learn many things
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. Now society is
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and young
. Because now society needs young
's power and
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. So l think that
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Plan your essay. Start with a short view, then give 2 reasons, then end with a short line.
Put ideas in order. Use small words to show order with 'first', 'also', 'but'.
Directly answer the question. Stay on the topic of age for vote and driving.
Give a clear example for each reason so the reader can see it.
Check spelling and grammar. Fix 'using', 'decreasing', 'before 30 years old'.
Add an intro and a short ending.
The view is clear: you want people under 30 to be able to vote
Uses simple, short sentences
The topic stays with you through the text
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
- Summary
- Restatement of thesis
- Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
- In conclusion
- To conclude
- To summarize
- Finally
- In a nutshell
- In general