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The best way to solve the traffic congestion in the city is to provide free public transport 24 hours a day, seven days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Traffic is an enormous urban problem in megacities, which provides solutions like free public
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 24/7. The vast majority of society choose to have their own car, rather than use public
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, which follows a traffic jam. Personally, I believe that providing free public
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 is a good idea, despite
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 has its disadvantages.
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, a
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 like free
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 can decrease the number of cars on the road,
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 reduce environmental pollution. That will help people to get to work on time, even in rush hour and live in a city with clean air.
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, the Scandinavian countries have free
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 in modern days and, as we can see the result is impressive. These areas have less pollution, than anywhere else in the world.
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, the benefits of free communal
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 include increased access for low-income individuals and reduced cost of living by removing
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 expenses.
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, the example we can see nowadays is student ID, which gives a huge discount on every road.
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, free mass transit alone might not be sufficient to solve traffic congestion. Measures,
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 as improving infrastructure and promoting alternative
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 methods could
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, the government can find funding and maintenance challenges,
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 a possible decrease in quality. In conclusion, summing up all the information free public
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 can be a really excellent solution for the majority of cities.
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, every town can not be solved only with
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 offer.

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Ensure that the introduction clearly presents the topic and your position. While the introduction in this essay introduces the topic, it would benefit from a more definitive statement of your position regarding whether you agree or disagree with the prompt.
coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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Present ideas clearly and expand upon them comprehensively by explaining how they relate to the topic. While ideas are presented, they could be expanded upon more fully to demonstrate a complete understanding of the topic.
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Include specific and relevant examples to support your arguments. While there are attempts to provide examples, aim for more accuracy and development to clearly illustrate your points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban planning
  • mass transit systems
  • traffic flow
  • rush hour
  • vehicle emissions
  • sustainable transportation
  • infrastructure development
  • commuter habits
  • overcrowding issues
  • public funding
  • quality of service
  • economic feasibility
  • environmental impact
  • modal shift
  • accessibility
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