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Some people believe that many young people do not play sports because they are afraid of losing . Therefore , sport competitions should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Dear Mr Don Philips I write
this
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 email in relation to the event everyone in our community is talking about. I understand there would be a slot given to speakers. I,
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therefore
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therefore,
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 suggest that you invite Strive Masiwa. He is a well-known
business person
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businessperson
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 and owns one of the biggest network companies in our country. I believe he would donate more books and cash to help grow
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 bookshop.
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, he is
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 known for sponsoring education
to
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for
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 those coming from poor families. So, donating books is a given since he has
passion
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a passion
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 for education.
Furthermore
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, Strive is an
ispiration
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inspiration
 to a lot of youths. He has helped some of the community members to start their own businesses. Because of
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, some people might be attracted to
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occassion
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occasion
 and attend in numbers. Thank you for the job you are doing for our community. I hope my suggestion will be considered. Do not hesitate to ask for more information if needed. I wish you all the best in the
up-coming
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upcoming
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 event. Best regards, Musa Thebe.

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task
Make the aim clear at the start. Say who you want to invite and what you want the reader to do.
organization
Break the text to small parts. Use a new line for the opening, the main part, and the end.
grammar
Fix easy spelling mistakes: ispiration -> inspiration, occassion -> occasion, up-coming -> upcoming.
punctuation
Use full stops and commas in the right place. A new idea should start on a new line.
coherence
Keep long lines short and use simple words. This helps the reader read well.
tone
Polite and calm tone to the reader.
content
Clear aim to invite a guest and give a reason.
content
Some good reasons are given to show why the guest fits the event.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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