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The table below shows information about the CO2 production released by five countries that produced the most in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given table depicts the details regarding the carbon dioxide production emitted by China,
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 States, Russia, India and Japan in 2006.
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, there were variations in the amounts of CO2 emitted by
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 countries. In fact,
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 is clear that the highest production was experienced by China
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 the United States emitted the lowest in 2006. China
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released 6000
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tons
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 of CO2 in 2006, which
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a
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 11%
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than
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 its previous
year
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. In 2006, Russia
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emitted nearly 1700
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tons
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, which was 600
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tons
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 higher than Japan's figure in the same
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.
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, both countries experienced no change compared to their previous
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. The lowest figure was recorded by
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stated
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, which accounted for 5000
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tons
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and
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 it was a 2% reduction
than in
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 2005.
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, India showed
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 8%
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than
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 its previous
year
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, accounting for 1300
million
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tons
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 in 2006. In terms of
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the average
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 amount of carbon dioxide production per person, the highest was noted by
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 States, which accounted for nearly 20 kg. The lowest per capita was recorded by India, accounting for 1.2 kg.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, tons, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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