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Band 6.5

The chart below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalofont.

The given pie chart and table
represents
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represent
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 information on particular library ‘s group ranges and various
type
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types
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 of
books
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,
while
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 the bar chart
showed
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 borrowed and
lended
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lent
 from 2007 to 2016.
Overall
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, Adult was the highest crew
than
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among
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 the
others
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other
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 age
people
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groups
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,
while
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 circulation was the lowest during the years. Most people went to the library to read their
favorite
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favourite
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books
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; there are four age kind of groups and the
major
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 accounted
51
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for 51
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% in 2016, which was 2 times more than children.
Similary
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, both seniors and teenagers had
alomost
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almost
 the same figures
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, 12
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% and 15%, respectively.
Additionaly
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Additionally
, the services of borrowing and check out, which children and
mature’s
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mature
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noval
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readers
 reached the same level of 38% and was 19 times more than
students reader
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student readers
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.
Whereas
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, the children’s DVD loans
was
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were
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 the lowest in all of programs, which
was
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constituted 1% and
was
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were
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lowered
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lower
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than children
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children
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children's
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acdemic
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academic
books
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 by 5%. The statistics of the people’s
books
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 return and
occupy
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occupancy
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 from 2011 to 2012; these
year
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years
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 reached the same figure of over 20,000, which was the highest
volum
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volume
 than other years and
making
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made
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 four
-
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fifth
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in
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of
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total
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the total
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 number of borrowers.
However
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, in 2017, the active user was
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at the
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the
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their
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 minimum, which was approximately 15,000 and was 1.5 times less than
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in others
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others year
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other years
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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