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Writing Samples
Band 2

You often visit a local music studio to practise singing and record audio recently you recived an email from the studio manger

1.2 Dear
manager
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 Thank you for informing me about my favourite
music
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studio
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which
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, which
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 is
loceted
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located
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Asaka
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, Asaka
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 city
but
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, but
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unfurtenetely
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unfortunately
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this
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, this
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music
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studio
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 will be closed for ten days .I appreciate you taking the time to ensure .I was
a
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apply
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made aware of the situation in advance .I am writing to share a few
observation
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observations
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 and
suggestion
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suggestions
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 regarding
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music
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the music
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studio
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manager
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take
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taking
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 full
responsibilty
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responsibility
 and
offer
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offering
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a
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apply
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batter
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better
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eqiupment
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equipment
 Id
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manager
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managers
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 use truly way
this
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studio
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 dagree will increase than other
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studio
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studios
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.My intention is to offer
consturactive recommadation
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constructive recommendation
 that may help
inhance
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enhance
.
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Firstly
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 Dear
manager
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 should change
same
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the same
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servise
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service
 staff
and
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, and
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more bring
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bring more
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 musical
instument
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instruments
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, especialy
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especialy
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especially
 for younger
teenegers
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teenagers
.
Becouse Today
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Because today
, a lot of people
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are intrested
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intrested
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interested
 in
play
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playing
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instrument
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instruments
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for
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, for
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 example guitar
which
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, which
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 is iconic around the world
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, especialy
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especialy
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especially
my
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in my
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 own
countries
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country
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. Thank you for
consider
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considering
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 these
recommadation
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recommendations
I
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. I
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trust your
music
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studio
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 will
contrabute
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contribute
 positively
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. to
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to please
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Please
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fell
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feel
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 free
contact
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to contact
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 me.If you require
on
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apply
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futher
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further
 input. Your sincerely

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structure
Make a short and clear form. Start with a greeting, then say what is wrong, then give two simple ideas, and end with a closing.
grammar
Fix the spell mistakes. Check 'unfortunetely', 'loceted', 'eqiupment' etc. Use 'unfortunately' and other common words.
style
Use short, simple sentence. One idea per line. Use 'I' and 'we' to show your view.
content
Be specific. Say what you want, e.g., more staff, more instruments for teens.
tone
Add a polite closing. Thank the manager and ask for a reply.
format
Format the letter as a real letter: Dear name, Yours sincerely, date.
tone
The writer is kind and polite.
content
The writer makes a clear wish to help the studio.
content
The idea of more help and gear is clear.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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