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There have been invention in human history( fore example wheel) Some say that the importan invention is the internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In early human history, there were many important
inventions
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 as the wheel. Some
people
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 believe that the most crucial invention is the
Internet
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. I partly agree with
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 view because other
inventions
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 can create some good flexibility,
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 the
internet
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 can be the most crucial
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inventions
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 in some situations.
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, one main reason why I agree with
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 view is that the
internet
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 has changed the way to communicate
and
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and find information.
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,
people
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 can communicate easily through the
internet
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and
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, and
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also they can useful get
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they can also get useful
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 information which is based on
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their study.
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, in remote areas
people
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 can study online and find some
vidoes
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videos
 on the
internet
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.
hovewer
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However
, older
inventions
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such
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 as
wheel
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the wheel
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, electricity
and
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, and
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also
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 printing press. The wheel helped
people
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 to go some places
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, and
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 electricity made life easier for companies to work and produce things. In the past
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,
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people
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 didn't use e-books because of no
internet
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and
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, and
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 they printed books and newspapers.
in
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 conclusion, nowadays,the
internet
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 is very important
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but it is not
only
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the only
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 essential invention.

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Task response
For task response: make your view clear in the first line and add more proof.
Coherence and cohesion
For coherence: use one idea per paragraph and connect ideas with simple link words.
Lexical resource
For lexical: use plain words well and fix wrong forms. Avoid new words you are unsure of.
Grammatical range and accuracy
For grammar: use short, simple sentences and check grammar and spelling.
Content
You link old inventions with the Internet, a good idea.
Examples
You give examples of how the Internet helps in remote areas.
Fully explain your ideas

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