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Writing Samples
Band 2

the plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans illustrate a
harbor
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harbour
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 in 2000 and how it looks today.
Overall
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, it can be seen, That many significant changes have taken place
by
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in
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 constructing a New hotel and café
and
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, and
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 shops. Life
boat
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lifeboat
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which
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, which
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 was located in the
sought
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south
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 of the harbour, remained unchanged
while
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 a new café and shops
has
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have
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 been added to the west of the life bout, and a castle in the
sought east
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southeast
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 of the
area
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area,
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where
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which
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 was disused in 2000,
it
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apply
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 has been destroyed and replaced by a new hotel.
another
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Another
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 interesting point is that there was a public beach near the castle
which
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, which
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 has been turned into
private
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a private
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 beach for the
hotels
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hotel's
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 guests. In the west
site
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side
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 of the harbour, the positions of fishing
boat
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boats
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 and private yachts have been exchanged
and
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, and
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 they
now are
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are now
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 located to the
north east
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northeast
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 and
sought east
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southeast
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 of the harbour
respectively
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, respectively
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and
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, and
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 the carpark
which
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, which
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 is located to the southeast,
it
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 has been extended to the main road. There were
shower
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showers
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 and toilets and a small car to the northwest of
area
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the area
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and
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, and
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 they still have
been
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remained stable. A new dock has been erected in the north of the plan.

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task response
The plan to explain the changes is good, but a clear overall view is needed at the start. Add one short line that says what you saw in 2000 and what you see now.
coherence and cohesion
Make the writing easy to read. Use clear pipes of ideas. Use words like first, then, next, and finally to show order.
content
You show many changes such as a new hotel, cafe and shops.
content
You note what stays the same (the lifeboat) and what is different.
structure
You try to compare past and now.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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