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The diagram below show the changes of a town called Bridgetown in 1700 and 2000

Two maps depict the layout of the settlement called Bridgetown and its changes over a
300 years
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300-year period
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Overall
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. Overall
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,
this
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 rural area was modernized and new
type
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types
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 of facilities have been created for the residents of the town.
Bridge
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The bridge
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 and
Market place
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marketplace
 remained unchanged, whilst
bypass
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the bypass
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 and
railway
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the railway
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was
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were
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 added to
this
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 place
To begin
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 with, in
1700
Punctuation problem
1700,
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 there was a bridge which was over a river
on
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in
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 the centre of the village. The
Castle
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 was located
nearby
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near
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 the river. In front of the
Castle
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, several trees
which
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apply
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covered the front side of the
castle
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. On the western side of the town, The Market place was next to the trees. To the
east
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east,
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 there was a large farmland which covered nearly
whole
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the whole
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 community Passing approximately 3 centuries, the town faced
to
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apply
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the enormous changes. The
castle
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 was converted to a local school for the inhabitants of Bridgetown, making
convenient
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it convenient
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 for them. Woodland stayed unchanged with additional plants.
Market
Correct article usage
The market
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 decreased in size to maintain enough space for
railway
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the railway
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. The railway
constructed
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was constructed
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 running from east to west, improving connectivity. The grass of the farmland has been allocated for calves and sheep consumption recently. Except
the
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for the
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 bridge, the bypass generated
crossing
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a crossing
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the
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of the
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 river in
half
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apply
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an oval shape.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words castle with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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