People who travel to another country to live, work or study for a period of time often suffer badly from homesickness. Why this problem occurs? What are the best ways to reduce this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There are a lot of
people
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who travel overseas to earn money or to
study
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however
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, most of the
people
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who live out of their country get homesick. The question is, the
people
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who travel for a
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are suffering from homesickness, what
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the best ways to reduce
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problem
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, and why
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does this
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problem
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happen. In my opinion, when
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humans
leaved
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their place,
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, they miss the place where they belong,
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, they get homesick. In
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essay, I am going to provide more details about
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and give my opinion. First of all, there are many
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who
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out of
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their country because they want to
study
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high
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education or they want to get
better
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a better
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job. So, they used to live with their family
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however
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, when they travel to
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a different
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country, they are going to meet
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community and different habits
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, they might belong to another religion.
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, they are going to
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experience
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homesickness.
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, I have studied overseas for a year
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therefore
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, I have got
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homesick because I meet different
people
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.
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,
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are many ways to reduce
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problem
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. You should not have free
time
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because the free
time
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will give
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to think and miss your home,
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, you ought to
study
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or read to
outcome
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the homesickness.
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, you should try to communicate with the
people
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and make
friend
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in order to hang out
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the weekend.
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,
In
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my trip overseas, I always
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in my free
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or hang out with friends. In
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conclusion, I would argue that studying and making
friend
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friends
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are helpful to reduce
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problem
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. Kim

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grammar
Fix small word forms and spell wrong parts. Use clear words like 'homesick', 'study', 'travel', 'country'.
style
Use short, plain sentence. Check that each sentence has a subject and a verb.
examples
Give one clear example for each big idea from life or a real case.
content
Some real life touch and own idea are in the essay.
structure
The essay tries to cover both parts of the task.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example
Topic Vocabulary:
  • homesick
  • homesickness
  • country
  • move
  • live
  • work
  • study
  • feel
  • sad
  • miss
  • family
  • friends
  • language
  • culture
  • home
  • adapt
  • adjust
  • routine
  • plan
  • help
  • support
  • group
  • club
  • friend
  • talk
  • listen
  • learn
  • speak
  • local
  • new
  • different
  • easy
  • difficult
  • visit
  • cook
  • food
  • city
  • campus
  • worry
  • stress
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