The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007.

The image presents three different types of filling consumed over 26 years.
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, there was a significant drop in the use of Margarine and Butter,
while
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low-fat spreads showed up later on with a considerable increase in a short period.
Firstly
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, butter reached the peak of usage in 1986 with 160
grams
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; after that, it experienced a continuous
falling
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from 160 to around 50
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.
Secondly
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, the consumption of Margarine was constant from 1991 to 1996;
then
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, it declined to 40
grams
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in 2007.
Thirdly
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, the usage of reduced-fat spreads started in 1996 with less than 20
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; after 6 years, it reached the top of more than 80
grams
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,
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then
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and then
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there
is
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a slight decrease.

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  • consumption
  • spreads
  • increased
  • decreased
  • stable
  • significantly
  • approximately
  • per capita
  • remarkable
  • peaked
  • experienced
  • started
  • remained
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