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Many people chose to study in a university. What is the advantages of studying in a university

Nowadays higher number of
students
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 plan to have a university
degree
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 after completing their high school. We will talk about the benefits
studying
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of studying
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 on a campus.
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, in the modern era,
students
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 pursue up
degree
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 after they finish high school
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because
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 a university
degree
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 certificate has a huge value and demand , not only its value but
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 they seek more knowledge in a particular field to gain their knowledge. The modern job industry expects more qualifications when they hire employees
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 competition for jobs. They tend
students
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 to local
universities
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as well as
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 fly off to seek
internation
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international
universities
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 .
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,
universities
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 are better than schools and colleges since they have more facilities ,
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 one more fact that
students
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 expect is freedom. There are so many rules and regulations in schools. As an example: there are no dress codes for university
students
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. There are a variety of subjects to study on campus , and
students
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 can choose whatever they want , and even possible to change them during the time period. There are a huge number of events related to their courses ,
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 a higher chance of getting good internships, since some campuses provide internships , and all lecturers are qualified and have better teaching skills of
teaching they
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also
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 use modern technology for teaching
which
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, which
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makes
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helps
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students
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 to study .
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, there is huge competition among workers and getting a university-level
degree
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 makes their values go up. Most
students
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 enrol on
universities
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 since they get deeper knowledge in a particular subject and more opportunities at the industry level since they meet experienced people from there. There are events, sports and more activities that
make
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attract
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students
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attracted
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apply
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to it.

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structure
Use one clear idea in each paragraph and start with a sentence that states the main point.
coherence
Link ideas with simple phrases like 'also', 'in addition', 'for example' so the flow is smooth.
language
Check grammar and spelling. Fix small errors with articles, verb form, and word order.
task
Give a short closing sentence that restates the main idea.
structure
There is a clear start and end in the text.
content
The use of 'Firstly' and 'Secondly' shows some order in ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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