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For the past year you have been a member of a local club. Now you want to end your membership. Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letter: state what type of membership you have and how you have paid for this give details of how you have benefited from the club explain why you want to leave

Dear Mr.perera, I'
m
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writting
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writing
this
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 letter regarding close my membership
from
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in
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local
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the local
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 club. I'
m
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 currently on
one
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a
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year
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one-year
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 contract
including
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, including
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 gym and swimming pool
which
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, which
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i'
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I'm
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m
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 paying around 15
aud
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AUD
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 per week
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. morover
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morover
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Moreover
, my payment option is
currntly
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currently
 direct debit. I want
inform
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to inform
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 you that my
1 year
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1-year
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 contract will end
in
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at
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this
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the
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 end of
this
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 month
which
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, which
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 will be
29th
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the 29th
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 of feb. I'
m
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 really happy
for
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with
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 the service
through out
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throughout
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 the
last
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 year
and
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, and
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i
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I
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 had good service during
this
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 time period
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, specially
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specially
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especially
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swimming
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the swimming
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 pool. There are many
life gards
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lifeguards
which
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who
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 keep their eye on us all the time and keep
our self
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themselves
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 safe
also
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,
gym
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the gym
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 is
fulled
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full
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with
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of
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 modern machines and good staff
gives
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give
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 me
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a peacefull
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peacefull
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peaceful
 area to train.
unfortunatily
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Unfortunately
, I decided to move back to my country
due
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to
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For
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this
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reason
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reason,
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 I need to cancel
this
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 and
i;
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I'm
m
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 happy
provide
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to provide
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 any details regarding
this
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 if needed. Thank
your
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you
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 for the service so far. Yours faithfully, Lakshan.

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grammar
Fix spelling and cap letters. Use 'Dear Mr Perera,' and 'I am' instead of 'I'm' in a formal letter.
structure
Try to put one idea in each paragraph. First say what you join and how you pay, then say what you gain, then say why you leave.
tone
Keep a formal and plain tone. Use simple words and short sentences for clear talk.
content
The letter tells what type of join and how you pay.
tone
It keeps a polite tone and ends with a closing.
content
It says why you leave and thanks the club.
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