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The flow chart illustrates how pencils are made, beginning with planting seedlings and culminating with delivery to customers.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

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The picture shows
the
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apply
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every step of making pencils.
Overall
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, it is a linear
process
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 consisting
eleven
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of eleven
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 stages, beginning with materials that
taken
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are taken
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 from nature and
ends
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ending
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 at a factory. The
process
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 starts
at
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in
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 the environment with planting seedlings,
then
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 after 4
months
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months,
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 young plants
replanted
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are replanted
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 to another place. After three
years
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years,
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 young plants are thinned as they
enough
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have enough
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 light and water.
Next,
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after 14
years
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years,
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 mature plants are cut down. After cutting down, the
process
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 continues at the factory.
There
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There,
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 the wood of
plant
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plants
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are
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is
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cutting
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cut
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to
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into
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 thin
piece
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pieces
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 and
treating
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treated
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in special equipment.
As a result
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, processed boards. After 60 days, in boards are making
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a gloove
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gloove
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groove
, inside it puts glue and above
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it put
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put
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puts
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 black lead.
Subsequently
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, place the other board and make
sandwich
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a sandwich
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 which
are
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is
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 hard pressed at high temperature. Ready boards are separated and painted, sharpened, stamped. The
process
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 ends with the finished pencils and
delivering
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their delivery
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 to shops.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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