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Some people believe that parents are the best teachers for children while others think that schools are more important.

Nowadays
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Nowadays,
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parents
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 raise their
children
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 very important and
her
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their
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 nurture.
Actually
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Actually,
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childrens
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children
 for
second
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the second
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familiy
Correct your spelling
family
their
Verb problem
are their
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 teacher.
For
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example
Add a comma
example,
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child
Fix the agreement mistake
children
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 get basic
knowledge
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 from
parents
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.
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Thereafter
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Thereafter,
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 they go to the
kindegarden
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kindergarten
. Those learnt
to
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through
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 education, mental
creative
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apply
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and
intelektual
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intellectual
creative
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creativity
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Linking Words
for
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, for
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example
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example,
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 counting,
make
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making
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an
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apply
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animals , drawing a picture
Linking Words
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, this
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this
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these
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 activities from a teacher.
Parents
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 are
main
Correct article usage
the main
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Correct your spelling
position
positsion
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positsion,
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their
Correct pronoun usage
they
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are
Verb problem
have
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Use synonyms
knowledge strong
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strong knowledge
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for
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, for
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 they must exercise together.
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Firstly
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Firstly,
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 knowledgeable
parents
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to
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apply
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give their
children
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 much
knowledge
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.
For
Linking Words
example
Add a comma
example,
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 they
to
Verb problem
have to
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 study at home
but
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, but
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parents
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because
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, because
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 of work and many problems, tiredness, depression they lack
of
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apply
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time for
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children
Correct pronoun usage
their children
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. As
result
Correct article usage
a result
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Use synonyms
children
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, children
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 of
give
Use the right word
five
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 at
kindegarden
Correct your spelling
kindergarten
, because game with study
at
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apply
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here. In conclusion
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,
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I think
parents
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 have to find time for
children
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. Every day
fathers
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, fathers
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 or
mathers
Correct your spelling
mothers
to
Verb problem
apply
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make time
one
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for one
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 hour
eachday
Correct your spelling
each day
. The
knowledge
Use synonyms
 was given by
teacher
Correct article usage
the teacher
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,
parents
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 must support of
childrens
Correct your spelling
children
.

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Plan your answer first. Write a short plan that states your view, then two or three ideas with simple examples.
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Treat the essay as two sides. Say a view, then the other side, then your own view.
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Use clear links like first, next, also, then, and in the end to show order.
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Make your main idea clear in the first line and keep a simple plan through.
content
The idea that parents play a role in early learning is clear.
structure
There is a final idea that time from parents is needed.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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