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Band 6.5

The two charts below show the living arrangements of two different age groups in a certain country in 2015.

The given pie charts illustrate different age
individuals'
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groups'
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 choices about their living arrangements in a particular nation in 2015.
Overall
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, most adults aged 25 to 34 chose to live with their parents and flatmates,
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 mature
people
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 have chosen their partner or spouse.
To begin
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 with, adults aged 25 to 34 have the highest percentages for living with their parents or flatmates. After, adults aged 25 to 34 have a similar proportion for living alone or living with their partner or spouse.
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, when it comes to more mature
people
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 aged 35 to 44, they are expected to live with their partner or spouse.
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, there was the lowest percentage for living with their parents among older
people
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 , which was aged 35 to 44.
Next,
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the percentage of
people
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 who like to live alone and with flatmates was a similar amount in the given time period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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