The diagram below shows how ethanol fuel is produced from corn. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The
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illustrates how to
ethanol
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produce ethanol
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fuel
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from corn and the main features . Who
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one of the most important
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,
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make
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the brain work
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it has a nice visual. The diagram below starts with the corn
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I think it is a good
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then
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the share
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to storing that share
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milling
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it make
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cooking
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for 4 hours with
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water. The fermenting
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about 48 hours
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this
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is a very long time .
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the separating solid
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make
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it liquid . We will go to the purifying ethanol is one of the most important thing in the
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and it will take about 5 hours so the storing came back and the transporting will be higher.
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how
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the
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the fuel for the corn
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it
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the
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very
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and
convenient
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words map with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ethanol
  • corn
  • harvesting
  • milling
  • cooking
  • fermentation
  • distillation
  • dehydration
  • enzymes
  • fermentable sugars
  • concentration
  • anhydrous ethanol
  • fuel
  • processed
  • mixture
  • yeast
  • carbon dioxide
  • high temperatures
  • surface area
  • separation
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