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The following two pie charts give the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart
offer
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offers
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 returns about
vogue
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Vogue
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students
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students'
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action
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actions
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 dissimilar among adults in
the
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apply
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European
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Europe
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. The shape shows us some people prefer watching TV
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while
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, while
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,
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apply
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other
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others
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 persons interested
of
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in
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 talking with friends
but
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apply
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, and more people like talking with family
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apply
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also
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,
another
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and another
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 part
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, they
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they
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there
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 are
few
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a few
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 not crucial.
Overall
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, when
look
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looking at
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 to
form
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form,
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 we find value
highe
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high
 it watching TV
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, from
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from between
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among
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 all the values in the pie chart
through
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apply
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,if
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. If
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we more
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more
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focus more
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focus
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focus,
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 we will notice that
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the
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other very lees . At the beginning of the
period
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period,
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 that people
who are
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apply
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watching TV around 32 it is considered increased in
the
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1985 .
However
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 ,there
many
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are many
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others
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other
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 individuals
,
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apply
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they
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who
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 don't any activity's
this
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maybe
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may be
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that
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what
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influence
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influences
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 negatively almost 6.
On the other hand
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,
that
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apply
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humans talking with friends nearly 21
comparison
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times compared
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with
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to
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 individuals who
eating
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eat
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 out or so 23 . Talking with friends and eating out
it is
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were
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 considered similar values from each other in
the
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1985 and 1995.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pie charts
  • Leisure activities
  • European adults
  • Survey results
  • Popularity
  • Comparison
  • Ten-year period
  • Walking
  • Cycling
  • Increase/Decrease
  • Percentage
  • Popularity shift
  • Team sports
  • Solitary activities
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