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The three pie chart below show the total school spending in UK in three periods.

The three pie charts illustrate the different amounts of total cost in educational institutions in the UK in 1981, 1991 and 2001.
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, the highest payment of all three years was teachers' salaries, which fluctuated between 40 per
cent
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 to half of the total budget during
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 period.
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, the least proportion in the spending was the insurance, which has a slight growth from only 2 per
cent
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 in 1981, 3 per
cent
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 in
1991
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 to 8 per
cent
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 in 2001, respectively.
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, there is a decrease in other workers' salaries in the total cost from 28 per
cent
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 in 1981
,
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 to 22 per
cent
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 after a decade, which was a continuous decline to only 15 per
cent
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 in 2001. The costs in the other two parts, resources and furniture or equipment, have a big fluctuation over the three decades. It was 15 per
cent
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 in each part in 1981, but it became 20 per
cent
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 and 5 per
cent
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 in each section after 10 years. And it was 9 per
cent
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 and 23 per
cent
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 in 2021.

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