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The line graph shows the average number of people attending top level football matches in three European countries from 1980 to 2004.

The line graph illustrates information about how many
people
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 attended high-level football matches in three European countries ( Italy,
England
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, Germany) over a twenty-four-year period between 1980 and 2004.
Overall
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, the number of
people
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 who attended high-level football matches in
England
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 and Germany experienced a
steadydecline
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steady decline
,
the
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but the
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 reverse was true for Italy.
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,
England
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 showed a higher increase over the period. The number of
people
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 who attended the match in
England
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 and Germany exhibited somewhat similar trends. After decreasing steadily to just 2000
people
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 who visited a match in both countries in 1986,
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then
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apply
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the figures experienced a noticeable rise to about 35000 until the end of the period.
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, the
people
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 who attended the match in Italy started with 35000
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people
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people,
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then
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this
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 figure experienced a marginal increase to 37000 in 1986. After six years, it went down
notiecably
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noticeably
 to about 25000 in 2000.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, england with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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