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Writing Samples
Band 5

Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

First of all, many people oppose spending on
space
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 research because they consider it unnecessary. They argue that these funds could be better allocated to address urgent problems in society.
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,
instead
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 of investing heavily in rocket development, governments could use the money to improve the quality of education or healthcare systems, which would have an immediate impact on people’s lives.
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, I believe that investment in
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 exploration is
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 extremely important.
Space
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 research can lead to the development of new technologies and the discovery of resources that may be crucial for humanity in the future.
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, knowledge gained from astronomy could help us find new places to live or develop resources to sustain the growing human population.
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, I strongly believe that
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 research should continue to receive substantial funding. In conclusion,
while
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 many people think that the budget should be spent on solving problems on Earth, I fully support the continuation of
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 exploration
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 its long-term benefits for humanity.

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task response
Your answer is clear on what you think. To be better, add a short intro that states your view and end with a strong closing line.
coherence
Use simple link words to tie ideas. Use words like and, but, also, so, because.
organization
Try to put the same idea in a new part. Start each idea with a small idea sentence and give one real example.
content
Give a clear view on one topic at a time. Do not open too many ideas at once.
content
Examples should be clear and show why space money can help later. Try one good example for each point.
task response
The writer takes a clear view.
coherence
Both sides are shown, not just one.
structure
There are clear signs and a closing line.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space research
  • living standards
  • technological advancements
  • expand
  • knowledge
  • curiosity
  • priority
  • balancing
  • investments
  • inspire
  • unite
  • globally
  • long-term
  • economic benefits
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