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The maps below show how the town of Pebbleton has changed over a period of 20 years.

The pictures demonstrate what
changes
Use synonyms
 have been in Pebbelton town for 20
years
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. 
Overall
Linking Words
,
school
Correct article usage
the school
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 at the
down
Check wording
bottom
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 of both pictures did not
experienced
Wrong verb form
experience
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 any
changes
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. Two territories
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 connected with a
roadbridge
Correct your spelling
road bridge
.
Also
Linking Words
, the lighthouse
not
Verb problem
does not
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Use synonyms
changes
Wrong verb form
change
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 over the period. Mostly, there have been built new houses and building. Twenty
years
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 ago, at the
north-west
Add a comma
north-west,
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 there was
old
Correct article usage
an old
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 fort, but now it is a children's playground. Near the
playground
Add a comma
playground,
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 the community
center
Change the spelling
centre
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 was built.
At
Change preposition
In
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 the west-south
territory
Punctuation problem
territory,
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 there was
film
Correct article usage
a film
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 studio, and
instead
Linking Words
 of
Linking Words
this
Correct pronoun usage
its
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 building
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 built
flats
Check wording
apply
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. By the sea, twenty
years
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 ago were a few houses
,
Punctuation problem
;
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as of
Change preposition
apply
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today were built several houses
.
Verb problem
have been built.
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 In front of the community
center
Change the spelling
centre
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, there was made a green space
.
Verb problem
was made.
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 The Old Fort Road did not
experienced
Wrong verb form
experience
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changes
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, except
at
Correct word choice
that at
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 the back of the school there were built a footbridge
over
Verb problem
was built over
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 the river to connect
two
Correct article usage
the two
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area
Fix the agreement mistake
areas
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.
At
Change preposition
On
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east
Correct article usage
the east
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 side of the
land
Add a comma
land,
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 there were
not
Rephrase
no
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changes
Use synonyms
 over a period of 20
years
Use synonyms
.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, changes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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