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You recently started a new job. After working for a few weeks, you are having difficulty managing your work schedule. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain when you started the job and what your role is describe the problems you are facing with your work schedule suggest changes that could help you work more effectively You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to address the difficulties I have been experiencing nowadays, managing the schedule in accordance
to
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roster
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the roster
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. Since I joined the organisation. As
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a result
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result
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 I witnessed the sudden drop in my performance. I accepted the offer letter organisation
,
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apply
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 on October 23rd as a Fibre Optic Technician. My key responsibilities are
:
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 doing the inspection fibre network in the designated areas, troubleshooting the fibre cables
and
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draft
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 the plans for upcoming projects with the help of the QGIS mapping.
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, maintaining the company vehicle and filling a
pre inspection
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 report daily. As I
newly
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 introduced to these operation procedures, I am facing problems in managing the
in house
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 application for task tracking, where employees are required to enter the reports on
hourly
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an hourly
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 basis. As
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a result
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result
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result,
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 there were some instances in a day, where I
need
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 to troubleshoot the network because
of
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this
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 inspection has been taking long hours to figure out the outage issue. These
kind
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 of troubleshooting practices
puts
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put
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 me in a situation
how
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to administer those hourly reports.
Certainly
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 I do agree with
this
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,
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 these
kind
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 of
application
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applications
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meant
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are meant
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 to increase the productivity of
corporation
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corporations
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, in
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. In
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contrary
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contrary,
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 my key job role does not align with the
company
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company's
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 statement
operating
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of operating
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 procedures. I would like you to have a look, I am open
for
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 the suggestions and will be waiting to hear back from you. Yours Adam.

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structure
Add a clear start that says when you joined, your role, and why you write this letter.
content
Give exact ideas for how to fix the plan, such as fixed shifts or a meeting to plan the next roaster.
language
Make each paragraph about one idea and use link words like and, but, also to join ideas.
tone
Polite tone and respect to the manager
content
Clear job role and tasks are named
attitude
Shows you want to talk and fix the schedule
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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