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Some people believe that success in life comes from hard work, while others think that luck plays a more important role. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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 been argued that reaching your goal in
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life
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work
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 . Other
people
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 believe that it might be
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coincident
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no
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, no
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 matter how you
work
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essay
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i
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 will discuss both views
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and give my own view . On one hand, working on your career will
develope
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develop
 your
skills
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 and make you more
valuble
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valuable
.
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Therefore
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 if you have
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a job
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 and want to get
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promoted
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premoted,
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 you need to
work
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 on courses and soft
skills
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. There is nothing to do with luck in order to get high
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high-standard
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 occupation.
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, some newspapers did
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an analyis
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analyis
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analysis
 on
what
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degree the
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the degree
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most
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that most
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 of
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the componies
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 CEO’s have , they
find
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 out that 90% of them have at least PHD.
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, some
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hard working
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hard-working
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people
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 did not find the bright future they
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were
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 looking for
as
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, as
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 much they have done.
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, some individual have worked in their dreams by studying or
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thier
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their
skills
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 , or gaining experience
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 it did not
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 for them,
while
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the
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other have done
lesser
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work
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 and
get
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sucesseful
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successful
.
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, some
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researchers
 find that 40% of
intelligence
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intelligent
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people
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 do not
sucessed
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succeed
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lifes
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lives
,
becuase
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because
 they
not
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socialises
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socialised
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. In my own
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perspective
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prespective,
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i
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I
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 agree with
this
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 view , and
i
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I
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 see that it is not important to
give
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work
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 hard working and you
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can have
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good
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a good
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life
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apply
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career without
hard working
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working hard
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.
To conclude
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 , some
people
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 would say that they have to
work
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 harder to get
sucesseful
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successful
,
due to
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hard
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the hard
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skills
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 and good degrees they have .
Other
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Others
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 would argue that not critical to
work
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 more than
other
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others
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 and you can get it by luck or
less working
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working less
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. In my
view
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view,
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i
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I
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 see that the
seconde
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second
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 opinion is right and
i
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I
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 totally agree with it , and you can build
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a sucesseful
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sucesseful
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successful
 pathway with luck .

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structure
Plan the essay: clear intro, two views, and a clear own view. Use simple link words to show order.
language
Use correct facts and spell words right. Check spelling and grammar.
content
The writer shows both sides and has an ending.
content
The writer gives a clear own view.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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