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Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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recent years, the trend of working and studying from home has become increasingly common
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 the rapid development of affordable technology. I believe it is a positive development, as it allows people to save
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, reduce expenses, and achieve a better work-life balance.
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, one benefit is making people's
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 one hand, learning or working from home can be beneficial by saving the
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 taken to school or the job.
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 survey said that online jobs or studying gives you more
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 spend on the way to work , sometimes traffic can take an average of 2 hours to go and back to your job or college.
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, it can lower the money you spend. When you go daily to your work or
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, you need to pay a lot of money for a car or public transport and pay for gas ,rather than online studying you do not pay for anything.
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, my friend studies an online course ,and he pays less than me by 50% annually , because I have to buy car items and pay more for maintenance ,and he does not .
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, studying or working from home from my
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 has more
positives development
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, like it can reduce the expenses that you pay
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 going to the
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job
 or school.
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therefore
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having
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 an online
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job
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 that you spend on going to your workplace by an average of 2hours daily.

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structure
Plan your essay before you write. State your view in the intro, then two clear ideas in the body, and finish with a short conclusion.
language
Use simple, short sentences. Check spelling and keep grammar simple so the meaning is clear.
content
Give one clear example for each idea and use any number or fact if you can to back it up.
strength
The writer shows a clear view from the start.
strength
Two reasons are used to show why the view is positive.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remote work
  • e-learning
  • accessibility
  • inclusive
  • productivity
  • personalized learning
  • disciplined routine
  • interpersonal skills
  • cybersecurity
  • sustainability
  • work-life balance
  • physical disabilities
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