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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Some people believe that social media has more negative effects on individuals and society than positive ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Social media became more and more
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popular
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and
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 some people argue it has more
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negative impact
to
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on
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the
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apply
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people and
the
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sociaty
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society
. I strongly agree with the
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statement
 and
i
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I
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belive
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believe
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 that the
contenct
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content
 needed to be more
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positive
 and it will help
peoepls
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people
 to use it in more better way.
Firstly
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, students are spending more and more time on social media, which
make
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 them away from their studies and
reduce
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reduces
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 the
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focus
 on studies. It will
negativily
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negatively
 affect
on
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their future
and
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, and
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it
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they
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 can be more and more addicted.
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Furthermore
, we can see most of
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the younger
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peoples
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people
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 are dreaming
to become
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of becoming
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a
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an
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 internet star doing some
of
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unnesseary contenet
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unnecessary content
. As an
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example
people
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, people
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 posting videos that they show
eat
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eating
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lot
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a lot
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 of
foods
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food
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.
Secoundely
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Secondly
,
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Due
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due
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 to
addetion
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addition
most
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, most
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 of
younger
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the younger
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 generation
not
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are not
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intract
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in contact
 with
other
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others
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 for
phsycle
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physical
activites
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activities
 or social gatherings. It will create
a
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more and more social problems in the future
due to
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lack
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a lack
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 of
activites
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activities
they
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; they
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 will face some
of
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helth diffuclties
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health difficulties
. In
conclution
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conclusion
,
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for
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thses
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these
 two reasons
i
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mention
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mentioned
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 above
I
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, I
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totally
agrred
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agree
 with the
statment
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statement
and
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, and
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 it
need
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needs
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 to be
controled
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controlled
 using
tactices
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tactics
such
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sa
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as
 social media time or some online
restrication
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restrictions
.

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language
Fix spelling and main words so the meaning is clear.
content
Add more clear examples and explain each main idea simply.
coherence
Use clear link words to join ideas, like 'and','also','but','therefore'.
structure
End with a short strong line that restates your view.
content
The writer shows a clear view that social media can be bad.
structure
There is a basic plan with sign posts like 'First','Second','In conclusion'.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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