You are a student at your school, and the canteen manager sent you this message: Dear Student, We are planning to make some improvements in our school canteen and would like to hear your suggestions. What new meals or snacks would you like us to include? What facilities or seating areas should we improve? What events could we organize to make lunchtimes more enjoyable? Best wishes, The Canteen Manager

Dear canteen manager, I am writing to share suggestions that help make

school

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the school

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canteener

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canteen

more enjoyable and convenient for students.

Firstly

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, the menu should include different types of

meal

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meals

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such

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vegetearian

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vegetarian

food, drinks, and salads. New meals like noodles, sandwiches, or fruits and vegetables are added

the

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to the

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menu.

Furthermore

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, the

canteener

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canteen

should

full

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be full

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of tables and chairs. They must be soft and

convinient

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convenient

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, the payment would be faster because of the fact that it

help

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helps

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reduce waiting time. There would be air conditioning and heating for being hot and warm. The places should be wider

due to

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the fact that the area becomes very crowded during lunch times. Air conditioning

creats

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creates

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a more

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comfortable

anad

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and

fresh environment.

Finally

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, the canteen could

organize

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organise

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fun events. These activities would attract more students and create

positive

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a positive

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atmosphere for

studens

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students

. Thank you for considering these ideas. I hope they will be helpful. Yours

sincerelly

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sincerely

, Dilnoza.

daminovnurali007

Jan 8, 2026

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structure

Write one idea per line. Start with a small plan: what you want, why, and how to do it. Use full stops.

language

Spell words right. Use 'canteen', 'vegetarian', 'comfortable', 'plan' etc. Have a friend check it.

coherence

Make three parts: meals, space, fun. Put a line before each part. Use 'first', 'then', 'finally' to show order.

content

You ask for meals, space, and fun. This shows you care about both eat and time.

tone

You show a polite tone and close with thanks.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16
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<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

153 words

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