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The tаЬ/е and charts below give information оп the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in опе агеа of Britain. The tаЬ/е shows where the топеу сате from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information Ьу se/ecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where re/evant

The given table depicts the details about the
police
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 budget in the United Kingdom from 2017 to 2018,
while
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 the pie chart illustrates
the
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how the
money
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 was spent in the same period.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the largest amount of
money
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 for the
police
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 budget was supplied by the UK government in 2018. Meanwhile, the plethora of the
police
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 fund was spent
for
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on
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 salaries in
the
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both years. In 2017, for the contribution
of
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to
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police
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the police
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 fund, the government
had given
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 175.5
million
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pounds
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in
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2017, and its contribution was increased by
additional
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an additional
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 2.3
million
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pounds
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 in the next year. Local taxes constituted 91.2
million
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pounds
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, which was 11.1
million
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less
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pounds less
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 than that in 2018. Other sources
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such
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, such
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 as
grants
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grants,
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 contributed
by
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38
million
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pounds
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.
However
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, it was increased only by 0.5
million
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 in the next year. In terms of the expenditure of
this
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 fund, most of the
money
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 had been spent
for
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 salaries, which accounted for 75% and 69% in 2017 and 2018, respectively. For constructions and transportation services, both years experienced an equal figure, each accounting for 17%.
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, the lowest proportion of the
money
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 had been spent
for
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 technology, accounting for 8% in 2017, which was 6% less than that in 2018.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, money, million, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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