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Many countries thought that children have to do homework in their free time while other say children should do more outdoor activity. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that many nations think that kids have to do more outdoor
hobbies
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 others say kids have to do
homework
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 in their free time.
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 it is a commonly held belief that they have to do
homework
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 to get high marks in school, there is
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 an argument that to be in high physical fitness, they must play outdoors.
This
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 essay will analyse
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 topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On one hand, they have to review their lessons every day through
homework
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, and when they do
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, it will help them to remember their lessons.
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, to improve their understanding of lessons and let them understand anything they take.
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, every child must
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learn to develop responsibility and depend on themselves to do
homework
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.
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, a kid doing his
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 by himself can develop his skills,
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 when he grows
up
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up,
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 he will do everything without any assistance.
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, doing more outdoor activities will improve physical health and let us be active and help us to be social and grow a social community. It is
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 possible to say that it can reduce stress and
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make
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 us feel happier.
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, outdoor activities encourage social interaction and strengthen relationships.
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, going to play in the park or beach and staying connected with the people. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
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 question. On balance,
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, I tend to believe that one to set aside time for
homework
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 and outdoor activities.

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task response
Be clear on your view. State if you agree more, or if you like a balance. Then give 2 or 3 reasons to back it.
coherence
Make a plan. Use one idea per paragraph. Start with a topic sentence. Use linking words like first, next, but, also, for example.
content
You talk about both sides which shows you know the task.
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You give examples to show your point.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • homework
  • outdoor activities
  • children
  • learning
  • skills
  • physical health
  • social skills
  • stress
  • happiness
  • creativity
  • balance
  • development
  • responsibility
  • time management
  • free time
  • education
  • reinforce
  • well-rounded
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