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the diagram shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced. summarise the information by selecting and reportng the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The picture shows the steps involved in producing
ethanol
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.
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Overall
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Overall,
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 what stands out from the picture is that there are eight steps in producing
ethanol
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 from growing plants to releasing carbon dioxide into the atmosphere. First of all, plants and trees give sunlight and carbon dioxide as their essential energy to grow
and
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, and
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then
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 they are harvested after growing sufficiently. After being
pre-processing
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pre-processed
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 the plants by special machines, cellulose is extracted from the raw material
and
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, and
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then
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 it is processed in laboratories.
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the
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The
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 next step is that
sugars
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sugar
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 is made and microbes are added to
sugar
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the sugar
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 to produce
ethanol
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.
Finally
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, the
ethanol
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 is used as a biofuel in vehicles
such
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 as cars,
tracks
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trucks
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, and
air planes
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aeroplanes
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 and carbon dioxide is produced by burning these fuels and released to the air from the
exhausts
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exhaust
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. And
this
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cycles
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cycle
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 happens again.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ethanol with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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