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Learning to play team sports is an important part of a child’s education. Do you agree or disagree? Give reason for your answer. And include any relevant experience from your own knowledge.

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Introduction
As I have experience in that topic, especially in the
sport
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 know what matters is that in our life
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beleive
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believe
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should
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we should
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interoduce
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introduce
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sport
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 in the school and need to teach the kids how
impotatnt
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important
 to take it
seruisely
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seriously
.
Body paragraph 1
on
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 the
hand
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other hand
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, in
general
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 the
sport
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 is very mandatory and very
imortant
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important
and
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 it is
the
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 part of our life
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will see the positive
reflect
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 in our life
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from
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 my opinion
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that
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we
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 must
teaching
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 the kids that the
sport
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 is basically very
usefull
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useful
 and can help you to improve your physical health
,
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Body paragraph 2
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on
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 the other hand, the
manegment
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management
 of the school should add some activity for the kids, to make them more
powerfull
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powerful
 and make them more aware of their brain.
Body paragraph 3
to
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 be honest, I observed that any successful person that
i
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 ever seen should he enjoyed
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good health.
Conclusion
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overall
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,
i
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strong
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strongly
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 agree with
this
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planning
Plan your work. Start with one line that states your view. Then add two or three ideas with simple reasons. End with a short finish.
structure
Make one idea in each part. Use a clear topic sentence to show the main idea.
linking
Use simple links to join ideas: and, but, also, then, because.
content
Give a clear example from real life to prove your point.
grammar
Check grammar and spelling to be clear.
content
The writer shows a clear view that sport is good and should be in school.
content
The essay keeps to the topic at once.
content
There is a direct idea that sport helps health.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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