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Band 6.5

The chart below shows the changes in the percentage of households with cars in one European country between 1971 and 2001.

The bar chart illustrates ownership of cars
between
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among
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the
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apply
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people
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 residing in the European country in
percentagewise
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percentage
, in
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terms, in
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 the
years
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 1971 to 2001.
Overall
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, at
beginning
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the beginning
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people
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, people
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 with no vehicle had
a
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the
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 highest percentage.
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However
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However,
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No
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no
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car
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 household experienced a downtrend
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while
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, while
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,
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apply
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people
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 owning
single
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a single
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car
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 showed
upward
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an upward
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 trend throughout the period.
People
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 owning two cars had some fluctuations.
Although
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,
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apply
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initailly
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initially
two
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two-car
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car
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 households had a lower
perentage
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percentage
, it outraced citizens having no
car
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. In 1971, the No
Car
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category
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 was at
it is
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its
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 highest level compared to others, accounting for 50%. Over the
years
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,
this
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 figure steadily declined. By 1981, it had dropped by 8%, reaching 42%. A decade later, in 1991, it experienced
sharp
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a sharp
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 decrease to 30%. By 2001, it maintained
it is
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its
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 value, remaining at 30%. Meanwhile, the One
Car
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category
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also
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 showed significant trends. In 1971, its percentage was lower than the No
Car
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category
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, standing at 33%. Ten
years
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 later, it had not decreased much, accounting for 31% in 1981.
However
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, by 1991, the One
Car
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category
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 saw a sharp increase, reaching 50%. By 2001, it stood at 45%. The Two Cars
category
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 started with the lowest results in 1971 at 15%, trailing behind both the No
Car
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 and One
Car
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 groups. Over the
years
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, its value fluctuated slightly. It rose to 28% in 1981, dipped to 22% in 1991, and by 2001, it reached 30%, equal to the percentage of the No
Car
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category
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, years, car, category with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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