Students should pay the full cost for their own study, because university eduation benefits individuals rather than society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The problem of free access to university education is one that sparks great debates
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at all for the
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, it is well known that the majority of the
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who want to
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in universities are young people.
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, they might rely on
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others
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support,
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wealth for the lucky ones.
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, there are brilliant minds that emerge from the marginalised parts of the public. In consequence, the resources to sustain themselves are scarce.
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that the educated
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individuals
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is just a subjective point of view of a narrow perception.
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during the
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. All those persons represent
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, free education access would
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equal chances for everyone, in the benefit of the entire world.

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task response
Be clear in the opening paragraph about your view and keep it the same through the essay.
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You show a clear position on the topic.
coherence cohesion
You use basic linking words that show how ideas go together.
coherence cohesion
There is an introduction and a conclusion.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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