IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 1

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is
aruge
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argued
 that people can not do anything to enhance the environment,
Only
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only
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public
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the public
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 sector and major
comanies
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companies
 can make a change. I disagree with the nation as
i
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I
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belive
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believe
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the
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apply
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both parties have equal
responsiblity
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responsibility
 to protect the environment.
Firstly
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,
Accoding
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according
 to the recodes, the planet
earth
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Earth
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 is 6 billion years old
but
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, but
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humeans
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humans
are
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have been
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 living
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on earth
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earth
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Earth
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 for only 2000 years.
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However
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 over the period of
time
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time,
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 people
distory
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destroy
the
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apply
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one third
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one-third
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 of
the
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apply
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mother nature
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Mother Nature
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due to
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hamful activites becouse
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harmful activities because
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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people
thinks
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think
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 it is not their
responsiblity
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responsibility
. Every individual
person
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apply
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can
contributed
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contribute
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 to
enhance
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enhancing
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environment
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the environment
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such
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, such
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 as
stoping
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stopping
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 littering
to
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apply
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everywere
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everywhere
 and
relase
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releasing
 dirty water to natural water sources.
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The Goverment
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Goverment
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government
 can make the rules and
regulation
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regulations
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 to stop the pollution
and
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, and
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 large
coperations
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corporations
 can
cotribute
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contribute
 to

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task
State your view clearly in the opening line and keep it in every paragraph.
structure
Use one main idea per paragraph and give simple, clear examples.
grammar
Check grammar and spelling; use short, true sentences.
cohesion
Link ideas with small words like also, but, so to show connection.
content
You begin to show a view that both sides have a role.
structure
You try to outline a plan and some steps in your writing.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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