The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods, rice, wheat and maize, by People in four different countries.

The table chart compares the three basic
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foods
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calories that the four different countries'
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people
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consume per person per day. In general, the
Cambodi
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Cambodians
consumes
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the most calories of
rice
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at 1445,
while
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Poland
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the Polish
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people
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only have 19.
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wheat,
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Egypt has the biggest number at 1095,
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Cambodi
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Cambodia
has the smallest number at 18.
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Mexico
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people
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take the largest proportion of
maize
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consumption
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at 1083,
while
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Poland
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people
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do not eat
maize
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at all. In detail,
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Cambodian
people
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tend to eat
rice
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the most, followed by
maize
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, whose
consumption
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is 103.
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Poland
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has the
biggest
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amount of wheat
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, it only ranks
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second among the four countries and
rice
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is consumed
at
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only 19
by
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Poland
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residents. Speaking of Egypt, both the
consumption
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of
rice
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and
maize
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is above 500, which ranks
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second in each
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category
.
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but not least,
while
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Mexico trumps in the
maize
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consumption
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,
rice
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and wheat are both
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the
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third place at respectively 57 and 275.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, rice, poland, maize, consumption with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • rice
  • wheat
  • maize
  • country
  • countries
  • four
  • eat
  • eating
  • eaten
  • most
  • least
  • more
  • less
  • big
  • small
  • increase
  • rise
  • grow
  • decrease
  • fall
  • change
  • pattern
  • trend
  • compare
  • difference
  • food
  • diet
  • table
  • data
  • numbers
  • overall
  • across
  • in
  • each
  • country
  • main
  • reason
  • climate
  • income
  • price
  • culture
  • effect
  • cause
  • therefore
  • there are
  • there is
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