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The table shows the average time and money spent at different types of restaurants. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting in the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table highlights the average time and money used at various types of restaurants
according to
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 the
volume
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 of
transactions
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, transaction amount,
eat-in
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 amount, take-away amount, and the most popular item
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according
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, according
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 to three different
streets
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 in Vancouver. Georgia
street
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 appears to have the highest average of
transactions
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with
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, with
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 the number standing at 854, the median value at 10.69 dollars,
eat-in
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 at 405, and take-away at 449. The
overall
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volume
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 is relatively high compared to the other two
streets
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. Dunsmuir
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street
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Street
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 appears to have a medium average of
transactions
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with
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, with
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 the number standing at 750, the median value at 5.61 dollars,
eat-in
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 at 358, and take-away at 392. The
overall
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volume
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 stands in
middle
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the middle
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, between Georgia
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street
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Street
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 and Drake
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street
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Street
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. Drake
street
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 appears to have the lowest average of
transactions
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with
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, with
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 the number standing at 390, the median value at 9.02 dollars (comparatively higher than Dunsmuir
street
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),
eat-in
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 at 200, and take-away at 190. The
overall
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volume
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 is generally lower compared to the other two
streets
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. Interestingly, based on the most popular item, all three
streets
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 enjoy eating chicken, where Georgia
street
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 enjoys burgers, Dunsmuir
street
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 enjoys wings, and Drake
street
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 enjoys pasta.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, overall".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words volume, transactions, eat-in, streets, street with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The table provides data on
  • average time spent
  • fast-food restaurants
  • diners
  • cafés
  • fine dining establishments
  • average cost per person
  • dining experience
  • comparisons
  • relevant
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