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The restoration of old buildings in major cities in the world involves a lot of government expenditures. This money should be used in new housing and road development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
The
renevation
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renovation
 of old buildings in
well known
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cites
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cities
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 in the world involves a
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amout
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amount
 of
goverment
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government
 funds.
This
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 money
sould
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should
 be used in housing projects and
infastructre
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infrastructure
 development. I partly agree with
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becouse
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because
i
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belive
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believe
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 that
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 must
focues
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focus
 on both road development and
sustanability
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sustainability
 development.
Body paragraph 1
Firsty
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Firstly
,
The
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my primary reason for my opinion is
the
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that the
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renevation
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renovation
 of old
building
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buildings
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 helps to
creat
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create
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 more tourist
attract
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to
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in
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 some
cites
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cities
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and
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its
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it
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generate
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generates
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 more income
to
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 the country.
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, most of
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the peopel
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peopel
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people
 travel to see the
south australian
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South Australian
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 old
parliment
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parliament
 and
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the art
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art
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glarray
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Gallery
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addtion
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addition
 to that, the cultural and historical
building
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buildings
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 need to be
protct
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protected
 for
the
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the next
genarations
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generations
.
Conclusion
on the other
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hand
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its
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it
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need
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 to be

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language
Fix many spelling and grammar errors. Use simple, short sentences with correct subject and verb.
structure
Make a clear plan: small intro that states your view, two body parts with reasons and small examples, and a short conclusion.
content
Add a stronger balance. Say you partly agree and show both sides with easy examples about money for housing and roads.
content
The writer tries to show both sides.
content
There are ideas about money, tourism and how old houses can be used.
structure
Some effort to connect topic with gov spending and future life.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • restoration
  • government
  • expenditures
  • housing
  • development
  • old buildings
  • major cities
  • culture
  • tourists
  • communities
  • public spaces
  • museums
  • benefiting
  • urban environment
  • population
  • transportation
  • balancing
  • diverse
  • landscape
  • respect
  • future
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