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The restoration of old buildings in major cities in the world involves a lot of government expenditures. This money should be used in new housing and road development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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renovation
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cities
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 in the world involves a
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amout
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amount
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goverment
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government
 funds.
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sould
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should
 be used in housing projects and
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infrastructure
 development. I partly agree with
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 that
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goverment
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government
 must
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focus
 on both road development and
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sustainability
 development.
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,
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my primary reason for my opinion is
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renevation
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renovation
 of old
building
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buildings
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 helps to
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 more tourist
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to
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and
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its
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generate
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 more income
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 the country.
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, most of
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peopel
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people
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 old
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parliament
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addition
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 need to be
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protected
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the next
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generations
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language
Fix many spelling and grammar errors. Use simple, short sentences with correct subject and verb.
structure
Make a clear plan: small intro that states your view, two body parts with reasons and small examples, and a short conclusion.
content
Add a stronger balance. Say you partly agree and show both sides with easy examples about money for housing and roads.
content
The writer tries to show both sides.
content
There are ideas about money, tourism and how old houses can be used.
structure
Some effort to connect topic with gov spending and future life.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • restoration
  • government
  • expenditures
  • housing
  • development
  • old buildings
  • major cities
  • culture
  • tourists
  • communities
  • public spaces
  • museums
  • benefiting
  • urban environment
  • population
  • transportation
  • balancing
  • diverse
  • landscape
  • respect
  • future
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