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span.The maps show the changes made to a small museum and its surroundings in 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given diagrams illustrate the changes undergone in a museum between 1990 and 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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this
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 museum was significantly developed during
this
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 period. Meanwhile,
two
Correct determiner usage
a
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car
Use the right word
two-car
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 parking area was newly built to
accomodate
Correct your spelling
accommodate
 more vehicles and support
accesibility
Correct your spelling
accessibility
.
To begin
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 with, in 1990, there
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 two exhibition rooms, with
similar
Correct article usage
a similar
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 shape. The restaurant and shop were built attached to one of
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this
Fix the agreement mistake
these
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 exhibition rooms.
However
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, during
next
Correct article usage
the next
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 two decades, one of
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this
Fix the agreement mistake
these
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 exhibition rooms
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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 reshaped by making it smaller
and
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, and
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 the shop was enlarged to incorporate more shopping space.
Additionally
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, the cottage was replaced by a cafe.
Garden
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The garden
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which
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, which
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 was situated near
to
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apply
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the main
road
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road,
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 was replaced by a car park, and it was attached to another newly built car parking area
in
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on
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 the eastern side of
this
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 map. It is noteworthy that the garden
which
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, which
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 is located
in
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on
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 the northern side, entrance and
restaurant
Punctuation problem
restaurant,
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 remained the same throughout the given time

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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