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IELTS The table below shows the frequency of internet use (daily and weekly) in the European Union for two different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The aim of
this
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 report is to discuss the daily and weekly
use
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 of the
internet
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. The data in
this
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 bar chart presents five European countries.
Overall
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, in terms of daily
use
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 of the
internet
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,
Ireland
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 is dominating
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 in terms of weekly
use
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 of the
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internet
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internet,
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 the dominating countries are Austria and Finland. The graph shows that
Ireland
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 has the highest percentage, at around 95%, which is well above the EU average. The EU average is about 85%, showing that most people in the European Union
use
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 the
internet
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 every day. Lithuania follows with approximately 83%,
while
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 Bulgaria has the lowest daily
internet
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use
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 at around 78%. Looking at weekly
internet
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use
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, Austria and Finland have the highest percentage, at about 8%, meaning a small group of people
use
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 weekly
instead
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 of daily. Lithuania has about 4% weekly users.
Ireland
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 has the lowest weekly
internet
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use
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, close to 0%, which suggests that almost everyone there uses the
internet
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 daily.
In contrast
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, weekly
internet
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use
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 shows a very different pattern compared to daily
use
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. Countries
such
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 as Austria and Finland have noticeably higher percentages of weekly users,
while
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Ireland
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 has almost none. Generally, most people in the EU tend to
use
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 the
internet
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 daily.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words use, internet, ireland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • daily
  • weekly
  • internet
  • use
  • EU
  • year
  • years
  • table
  • data
  • gap
  • difference
  • higher
  • lower
  • increase
  • increased
  • rise
  • grew
  • more
  • less
  • compare
  • compared
  • trend
  • pattern
  • overall
  • notable
  • change
  • percent
  • percentage
  • people
  • online
  • access
  • devices
  • smartphone
  • work
  • school
  • home
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